I'm enjoying your story very much. just a few thoughts as you asked for them.
"He didn't think Mycroft for his intervention. Neither did John. Both refused to talk to Mycroft ever again."
"He" is a bit confusing here, Lestrade would be better.
"Sherlock gave them – had given them, John corrected himself bitterly – three months when they had married last year. Those three months were nearly over"
You say at the beginning of the story that almost a year had passed since Sherlock died.Later in the story you say a couple of months.
" Gwen's high-strung attitude"
Should be "highly strung".
"and whiles till fit and agile for his age"
Should be "while".
""I can mail you everything," Stamford offered."
Should be "e mail"
"Good Lord, Haydock, you1re still living in the Dark Ages down there? "
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Date: 2013-07-30 01:50 pm (UTC)"He didn't think Mycroft for his intervention. Neither did John. Both refused to talk to Mycroft ever again."
"He" is a bit confusing here, Lestrade would be better.
"Sherlock gave them – had given them, John corrected himself bitterly – three months when they had married last year. Those three months were nearly over"
You say at the beginning of the story that almost a year had passed since Sherlock died.Later in the story you say a couple of months.
" Gwen's high-strung attitude"
Should be "highly strung".
"and whiles till fit and agile for his age"
Should be "while".
""I can mail you everything," Stamford offered."
Should be "e mail"
"Good Lord, Haydock, you1re still living in the Dark Ages down there? "
should be "you're"
"I hope the two of you will hit off at once"
Should be "hit it off"