Progress report: Atonement (Torchwood)
Aug. 15th, 2012 07:14 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
wiseheartWell, Elfhelm refused to co-operate, so I went for the Torchwood story again today. I'm up to 8 pages of Chapter 5 and fairly content with it... save for the fact that it seems to spawn new chapters, as usual. Which is annoying, but nothing new.
Excerpt:
In which the gang discusses the unwanted attention to their work shown by UNIT's new commanding officer.
“I don’t know,” Jones admitted with a shrug, “but Colonel Oduya is a bit too ambitious for my comfort. Sir Archibald thinks he wants UNIT replace Torchwood completely and has certain supporters in the Home Office who’d like to see him succeed.”
“That’s so not good, in so many ways that I can’t even begin to count,” the bespectacled bald man in the white lab coat sitting next to the lady scientist said grimly. “Could Archie be simply paranoid? Ms Hartmann always said he was.”
The lady scientist shook her head. “No, he wasn’t. He simply didn’t like Yvonne Hartmann and refused to send her any reports on principle.
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If there's anything grammatically incorrect, a little hint would be welcome. This is another one of those dozens of stories that don't have a beta reader.
On other topics: one week until school restarts. It's a depressing thought.
Excerpt:
In which the gang discusses the unwanted attention to their work shown by UNIT's new commanding officer.
“I don’t know,” Jones admitted with a shrug, “but Colonel Oduya is a bit too ambitious for my comfort. Sir Archibald thinks he wants UNIT replace Torchwood completely and has certain supporters in the Home Office who’d like to see him succeed.”
“That’s so not good, in so many ways that I can’t even begin to count,” the bespectacled bald man in the white lab coat sitting next to the lady scientist said grimly. “Could Archie be simply paranoid? Ms Hartmann always said he was.”
The lady scientist shook her head. “No, he wasn’t. He simply didn’t like Yvonne Hartmann and refused to send her any reports on principle.
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If there's anything grammatically incorrect, a little hint would be welcome. This is another one of those dozens of stories that don't have a beta reader.
On other topics: one week until school restarts. It's a depressing thought.
