Voyager story found
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wiseheartRemember my post a couple of weeks ago? Well, after having surfed the Net like crazy for hours each day - and failing - I actually found the saved story on my HD. Go figure. I didn't remember that it was part of a series, and skipped it each time. Ah, well.
Re-reading it last night, I experienced the same disappointment as I often do with old stories I once used to like.
The premise is highly interesting, in several plot elements, but the end product is too long, full of gratutious - and unnecessarily descriptive - sex scenes of the Paris/Chakotay kind, the author clearly couldn't be bothered to use at least the spell check and even less to look up how to spell certain canon elements, like Saurian brandy, who are widely enough known for a fan to stumble over. The motivations aren't worked out convincingly enough - not to mention they change abruptly without a sound explanation - characterization is superficious, and there are endearments used repeatedly that no self-respecting man would use, no matter in what century.
But again, the author writes Marcus/Neroon slash in the Babylon5 fandom in the same style, so I shouldn't be surprised. I still like the story premise, and some of the alien cultures mentioned along the way are truly fascinating. I also like the conspiracy going on in the highest circles of Starfleet in the background, and I definitely love the fact that Admiral Paris is not the evil, cold-harded, wife- and child-abusing bastard for a change. That's such a boring cliché, and the author definitely deserves a medal for avoiding it.
The story also has Mpreg in spades. Now, I'm one of those perverts who enjoy Mpreg stories - if they're well written. Sadly, this is not one of those. And Chakotay is wildly OOC, behaving like a hysterical woman in several parts of the story(es). I know it's not easy to write a character who was so neglected and so poorly written in the series itself, but one can always build on actor Robert Beltran's charm and acting - this "Chakotay" could have been played by anyone else.
Summary: great ideas, poor execution - a definite disappointment. I want those hours of my life I spent looking for it back, please. :(
P.S: The fact that a story is old doesn't necessarily mean it must lose its attraction. In the same fandom and genre, I can still re-read and enjoy Ainzfern's stories, for example, despite their minor flaws.
Re-reading it last night, I experienced the same disappointment as I often do with old stories I once used to like.
The premise is highly interesting, in several plot elements, but the end product is too long, full of gratutious - and unnecessarily descriptive - sex scenes of the Paris/Chakotay kind, the author clearly couldn't be bothered to use at least the spell check and even less to look up how to spell certain canon elements, like Saurian brandy, who are widely enough known for a fan to stumble over. The motivations aren't worked out convincingly enough - not to mention they change abruptly without a sound explanation - characterization is superficious, and there are endearments used repeatedly that no self-respecting man would use, no matter in what century.
But again, the author writes Marcus/Neroon slash in the Babylon5 fandom in the same style, so I shouldn't be surprised. I still like the story premise, and some of the alien cultures mentioned along the way are truly fascinating. I also like the conspiracy going on in the highest circles of Starfleet in the background, and I definitely love the fact that Admiral Paris is not the evil, cold-harded, wife- and child-abusing bastard for a change. That's such a boring cliché, and the author definitely deserves a medal for avoiding it.
The story also has Mpreg in spades. Now, I'm one of those perverts who enjoy Mpreg stories - if they're well written. Sadly, this is not one of those. And Chakotay is wildly OOC, behaving like a hysterical woman in several parts of the story(es). I know it's not easy to write a character who was so neglected and so poorly written in the series itself, but one can always build on actor Robert Beltran's charm and acting - this "Chakotay" could have been played by anyone else.
Summary: great ideas, poor execution - a definite disappointment. I want those hours of my life I spent looking for it back, please. :(
P.S: The fact that a story is old doesn't necessarily mean it must lose its attraction. In the same fandom and genre, I can still re-read and enjoy Ainzfern's stories, for example, despite their minor flaws.
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