Trying not to squee too much here. But that was a most wonderful snippet. A few typos, but they did not disturb my enjoyment of the fragment. :)
I usually get bored by narrative, I'm often more interested in dialogue- but somehow, I was enraptured enough to hang on to every word here. I thought the style actually managed to... what's that word I'm looking for... compliment (?) Elfhelm's character more. Poor guy, though, having the women he desires end up with his brother... ouch.
This seems like a good beginning, though: establishing thr lead character and beautifully drawing out Rohan culture at the same time.
I'm now looking forward to your Rhun. :D
Thank you very much for posting this fragment, though. It was longer than I expected, (which is good, obviously! ;)) and I liked it. I only wish I could say something more constructive. :)
Oh, and now I will have to read 'The White Lady of Rohan' and 'Ice Blossom'. :P *puts them on reading list*
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Date: 2003-05-03 04:13 am (UTC)Trying not to squee too much here. But that was a most wonderful snippet. A few typos, but they did not disturb my enjoyment of the fragment. :)
I usually get bored by narrative, I'm often more interested in dialogue- but somehow, I was enraptured enough to hang on to every word here. I thought the style actually managed to... what's that word I'm looking for... compliment (?) Elfhelm's character more. Poor guy, though, having the women he desires end up with his brother... ouch.
This seems like a good beginning, though: establishing thr lead character and beautifully drawing out Rohan culture at the same time.
I'm now looking forward to your Rhun. :D
Thank you very much for posting this fragment, though. It was longer than I expected, (which is good, obviously! ;)) and I liked it. I only wish I could say something more constructive. :)
Oh, and now I will have to read 'The White Lady of Rohan' and 'Ice Blossom'. :P *puts them on reading list*