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wiseheartI've finished the capricious Chapter 4. *is relieved* AS I mentioned the last time, it didn't quite turn out as I expected, but I'm content enough with it. The whole thing is becoming slightly uneven after Chapter 2, switching to and fro between the different characters, but since I'm dealing with such a large cast, it's inveitable, I think.
I'd like to make it smoother, but it just doesn't work any better. I could lie to myself and say that I can still return to the story later and iron out the details I'm not satisfied with, but we all know that I won't, so it's a moot point. I've simply got too much stuff I still need (and want) to write to tinker around with old stories, even if it would make them better.
Excerpt:
(this time with a little fluff on the side)
“You need a long, hot shower and your bed,” Jack said. “Actually, a bath would be even better.”
“I don’t think I can manage,” Ianto replied, without opening his eyes.
Jack snorted. “Nonsense. I’ll carry you to the bathtub if I have to, but you’re not going to bed with all those knotted muscles. Your leg must be a mess by now.”
“You just want to see me naked,” Ianto still refused to open his eyes.
“That, too,” Jack admitted unrepentantly, “but tonight only for medical purposes. Wait here. I’ll start running that bath; then I’ll come back and help you.”
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Now on to Chapter 5. Which might take some time, as I don't have any sound concept about what should be happening there. Other than they'll have to go to Torchwood House. Eventually.
I'd like to make it smoother, but it just doesn't work any better. I could lie to myself and say that I can still return to the story later and iron out the details I'm not satisfied with, but we all know that I won't, so it's a moot point. I've simply got too much stuff I still need (and want) to write to tinker around with old stories, even if it would make them better.
Excerpt:
(this time with a little fluff on the side)
“You need a long, hot shower and your bed,” Jack said. “Actually, a bath would be even better.”
“I don’t think I can manage,” Ianto replied, without opening his eyes.
Jack snorted. “Nonsense. I’ll carry you to the bathtub if I have to, but you’re not going to bed with all those knotted muscles. Your leg must be a mess by now.”
“You just want to see me naked,” Ianto still refused to open his eyes.
“That, too,” Jack admitted unrepentantly, “but tonight only for medical purposes. Wait here. I’ll start running that bath; then I’ll come back and help you.”
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Now on to Chapter 5. Which might take some time, as I don't have any sound concept about what should be happening there. Other than they'll have to go to Torchwood House. Eventually.
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Date: 2012-08-13 11:24 pm (UTC)I definitely agree with you about Sarah Jane; although I must add that IMO Rose was every bit as bad as Gwen. Only that she had the excuse of being an uneducated teenager.