ext_1148 ([identity profile] adafrog.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] wiseheart 2018-07-26 02:15 am (UTC)

I think part of it is that I'm not familiar with these characters as you write them. So a little about the elf-'a full scrip on her shoulder.'
And I had to think a little about the dwarf sections. But I think it was this paragraph being the transition to a future time that didn't quite get me where I needed to be for the next section of dialogue.
Despite all these difficulties, life started to settle under the Mountain – although only slowly and with many throwbacks. A number of Dwarves began to return to Erebor; mostly those who used to live there under Thrór’s rule, or the descendants of such people. Most of them came from the Iron Hills, but there were also a few of those who had fled to the scattered FireBeard and StoneFoot settlements in Taforabbad, the Grey Mountains.

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